Okay...a little bit before Matrix jumps in.
First of all its short and I think that's good.
Second, probably should explain how you ended up in the destroyed world we're at only because we're about to head on to the next world so you can just jump in instead of having to post all that in the RP itself.
Oh and he should be a girl.
Preferably with large breasts.
And calls everyone oni-chan.
Even other girls.
In fact make her twins, so they can share the gear.
And they're maids.
Battle maids.
From the future.
And part cyborg.