Rewrite A Series

[shingamyeonblack]

I went into Agito expected some epic show that everyone talks highly about but I just never understood what was going on for the first 30 episodes, Souichi gets his memories back for 1 episode only to lose them again and make that episode pointless. Another Agito came out of no where, I was expecting him to be another character that was around for a while but nope, it was just some teacher we never met before. Gills and G3 were meaningless. Hojo was a bland proto-Kageyama who's only reason for being there was to mindlessly say "let's catch Agito" over and over....and to use G3 for an episode but to muck it up instantly. The exact same battle theme played every fight that every character was in (even the very last fight) and it got old real fast. Every time Agito got a new form it was downplayed so much that its like even the show didn't care he got a new form. Gills entire purpose was just to get killed over and over (You killed Gills again, you bastards!). The family that Souichi stayed with weren't interesting, especially Mana....Miss. Dues Ex.

Well, it does start slow because it tries to set up G3 while trying to figure out where to go from there, but once it catches a concept and it finds its pace, it moves very well. The first episodes are slower than G3's transformation. :laugh:

Another Agito's appearance shows that there are people with powers living among others just like that. You don't really see the scope of it until you get toward the end.

Gills and G3 are not meaningless. Gills is a character who understands his power and that he could die due to it, but he fights. G3 shows the human will to fight as well, although you could see it more because G3 is human and he tries his best, which is not good enough in that suit of armor.

I totally agree with the battle theme. It's cool for the first few times, but there are like three times per episode toward the end.

Well, it's true that Agito's new form is not exaggerated, but I like that. He keeps changing and to make a big deal of a change that will progress is not the best idea. It will resemble Dragon Ball Z's jumps after the Frieza Saga.

Gills really was meant to show the suffering through responsibility and battle because Agito and G3 didn't get hurt enough. I like Gills and I don't think that it was necessary to mess with him that much.

The family wasn't meant to be intriguing. It was a nice normal family that had compassion. You mean Deus Ex Machina? I think that Mana's power had been hinted, but not specified, so it's not quite that.

 

[Cyberslayer]

You mean Deus Ex Machina? I think that Mana's power had been hinted, but not specified, so it's not quite that.

Yeah, I meant Dues Ex as just a shorten of that. Examples of her powers being dues ex-ish are:
- Her psychic powers to find people for the cop, like when Souichi was framed for murder....why did he frame him again?
- Bringing Gills back to life (Just so he can die again. XD)
In all honesty...after episode 35 I skipped to the last episode to see what I missed, and all I can tell is that the villains finally started to move the plot in a direction and Gills had his Exceed form and Souichi had all his forms....although I still think it was a bad idea having Souichi live in the end.

 

[GoseiGold]

Kaizoku Sentai Gokaiger (Part 1)

Spoiler

*Gai would be from the same planet as Marvelous, the two of them were the ones to battle the Zangyack as GokaiRed and GokaiSilver with the survivors of the planets the Zangyack had already conquered or destroyed.

*Joe, Luka, Doc, and Ahim were four humans from earth who had observed the Legend War, yet AkaRed wiped their memories clean of the event to stop the world from mass panic due to the fact that all the Super Sentai teams had sacrificed the powers they had.

*Basco was a member of the rebels outward in the galaxy who was kidnapped by Akudos Gil and bribed him with a large sum of money and immunity from being sent to prison in exchange for ratting out the rebels and bringing him the dead bodies of Gai and Marvelous, Basco excepts and leads the Emperor's most fearsome fleet to invade the hiding spots of the rebels as Red & Silver fight against them Gai is the one who sends Marvelous on his way except Gai is defeated and captured by Akudos, who then sends Warz Gil to kill GokaiRed since he had the ranger keys and feared the idea Super Sentai would be given their powers back.

*Marvelous on the GokaiGalleon has spent a good 10 years fighting the Zangyack alone, heads to earth after seeing how his efforts have been in vain this entire time wants to give up being a Gokaiger and lay low thinking how no matter where he goes he will be found and brutally tortured or executed.

*However it's revealed that Warz Gil has been following Marvelous and decides to conquer the earth as well, thinking that capturing a planet and Marvelous will make his father notice that he is just as evil as Akudos, as the Zangyack attacks earth Marvelous decides that no matter the outcome he will fight and probably fail seeing as how the last 10 years, he has failed to live up to every promise to the rest of the planets he fought on as he engages the Warz' army the four earthlings have their memories of the Legend War restored by AkaRed who only did what he did so he could have four others take up the mantle of Super Sentai with this AkaRed gives up what is left of his life to create the ranger keys for GokaiBlue, GokaiGreen, GokaiYellow and GokaiPink. With their memories restored the four attempt to aid Marvelous with the four ranger keys appearing before them with this they have been formed to make the team known as Kaizoku Sentai Gokaiger.

*It's revealed later when Basco does show up on earth that Akudos Gil had a miniature bomb surgically implanted in his chest, so that he would never think of betraying him

*Gai's debut would show that he was captured and brainwashed by Zatsurig to become an enemy of the Gokaigers and kill them after a few episodes Marvelous manages to undo the brainwashing except it comes at the cost of Gai's death

*With the death of Gai, Marvelous goes off the deep end and ends up betraying the Gokaigers and sets off the kill the emperor's son as he attempts to call out Warz he attacks the rest of the Gokaigers who try to stop him with the act of revolting against a team AkaRed comes back to life and revokes his act of kindness stripping Joe, Luka, Doc & Ahim of their powers, after that Marvelous keeps heading off to find Warz at specific coordinates where they will have a fated showdown, which is all a set up by Warz to kill him. Meanwhile the four former Gokaigers steal a car to keep up with Marvelous who finally reaches his destination where he is ambused by Warz Giles' forces after being left near death the four arrive and attempt to fight without their powers, seeing this AkaRed returns the Gokaigers powers and as an added bonus seeing how far the Gokaigers would go to protect their friend revives Gai, except not knowing Gai has come back wrong.

*Gai's ressurection has made him quite insane seeing flashbacks constantly of what he went through in the Zangyack's prison for the most wanted criminals/enemies and lashing out violently at everyone,

 

[HenshinSlayer]

Ryuki:
- Instead of 13 riders and several riders fighting Mirror Monsters. There should be 100 riders. Some are heroes, some neutrals and some villains. Anti-Heroes & Anti-Villains. Ryuki is like Highlander. There can be only one. At least for the toys, some decks that are the best will be on sale.

- The mirror monsters that are non-contracted should serve evil riders. Every one that is contracted to a rider. The rider Odin, can be the final villain rider.

- Ryuki shouldn't be a moron but instead a teenager searching for his lost parents that were kidnapped, just half-like his Dragon Knight counterpart.

 

[cypsiman2]

Choujin Sentai Jetman:

- No love triangle.

- Gai Yuuki is more like Joe the Condor from Gatchaman; he is very aggressive about fighting the Vyram and constantly attempts to use excessive firepower as opposed to being a poser who constantly wants to abandon the fight.

- There is an actual sense of the Vyram as an organization as opposed to just some guy, a kid, and their robot traveling the multiverse and blowing stuff up for no particular reason.

- Empress Juuza sticks around for 4-6 episodes instead of getting killed off right away.

- The reverse dimension team also sticks around for 4-5 episodes.

- The Neo-Jetman team gets 3-4 episodes of screentime.

- Tran does not turn into Tranza; one Radiguet is plenty.

- Ryu dies in the final battle against Radiguet and joins Rie in heaven, as opposed to Gai dying a gratuitous and pointless shock-value death in the epilogue.

- For that matter, no epilogue.

 

[Painted_Outlaw]

I went into Agito expected some epic show that everyone talks highly about but I just never understood what was going on for the first 30 episodes,

You're not supposed to; part of the intrigue of the show is its pacing in how it deals with the many plots going on. (If only shows like Blade or Fourze had that kind of pacing....)

Another Agito came out of no where, I was expecting him to be another character that was around for a while but nope, it was just some teacher we never met before.

Correction, he was a doctor; albeit, one who had his license revoked.

The exact same battle theme played every fight that every character was in (even the very last fight) and it got old real fast.

So, what do you call Deep Breath? Or, Stranger in the Dark?

although I still think it was a bad idea having Souichi live in the end.

:shakefist

 

[LaZerwolfX]

Ryuki:
- Instead of 13 riders and several riders fighting Mirror Monsters. There should be 100 riders. Some are heroes, some neutrals and some villains. Anti-Heroes & Anti-Villains. Ryuki is like Highlander. There can be only one. At least for the toys, some decks that are the best will be on sale.

100 Riders.... How is this in any possible way an even remotely good idea? That would completely eliminate the potential for even a shred of character development at fifty episodes you would have to intro at least 2 riders an episode. No. Just, No.

- The mirror monsters that are non-contracted should serve evil riders. Every one that is contracted to a rider. The rider Odin, can be the final villain rider.

Mirror Monsters that don't have a contract are wild, they add an extra threat to the already dangerous mirror world and the rest of your statement makes no sense.

- Ryuki shouldn't be a moron but instead a teenager searching for his lost parents that were kidnapped, just half-like his Dragon Knight counterpart.

Ryuki wasn't a moron, he was just a regular guy (albeit a pretty dense one) BUT theres no reason to change the character to anything other than what he already is. And what difference does making him have missing parents change other than to make the rider more of a cliche?

This is my problem with these kind of threads, a large majority of these posts are either entirely miss the shows thematic intent, completely asinine or both. Just because you don't like a specific element in a series doesn't mean that you immediately know better than the original creator. Are there parts of various toku series that if given the opportunity to change, would I? Of course, but I think theres something to be said about accepting what a show is rather than just listing off what we think it "should" be.

Because honestly we don't always know better. And there are plenty of times where we as a group might not like an aspect of a series but i think we all need to keep in mind that we are not (nor ever will be) the target demographic here, and just because something isn't successful with us, doesn't necessarily make it "bad". We just aren't who that aspect was meant for.

 

[Glamador]

So, what do you call Deep Breath? Or, Stranger in the Dark?

Awesome?


If I were to rewrite Ryuki...hmm...there's really nothing wrong with Ryuki's writing. At least on a macro scale. I'd write in more of a random element to the cards, since you draw them from the deck blind. Make it so that randomness can turn the tide of battle and have Final Vents be really rare except for Ouja who has 4 and thus a much higher chance (not that he'd even GET 4 in my version, since those card draws were bullshit).

I'd introduce more riders earlier, and take the focus off of Ryuki since he was by far the least interesting and had the least affect on the story. Considering the plan to revive Yui had failed a myriad times before with and without his inclusion, clearly his influence was less of an impact than Yui's own sense of morality. And really, that was Ryuki's only purpose in the story, to question the necessity of the Rider War and give Yui an example of selflessness that bolsters her own.

I guess I'd really just mess with how and when the Riders came into conflict with each other, when they died, and how much screentime was devoted to each one. They all needed to play off of each other as individuals and alliances. Sort of like in the anime Fate/Zero which is basically the same story but better. As it stands Ryuki is just kind of boring and frustrating until episode 40. The pacing needs the most reworking.

 

[HenshinSlayer]

I wish the riders from Kabuto-Wizard can go back to monster of the week like it did with Kuuga-Hibiki. Plus more episodes and not stop at 48.

Fourze:
- I like Fourze & Meteor. But I wish it had more riders. The show should have a zodiarts rider, someone related to Gamou Mitsuaki. Since Rokuro made the Fourze system for Kengo, Gamou can not only create zodiarts switches but a rider system from his own design... something alien.

- Gentaro may be okay due to his gangster look. I wish he had some weaknesses to show like how Shotaro, Haruto & Eiji feel. Like if the zodiarts rider I suggested was made, his part of the story would show that he was the one that killed Gentaro's parents (by accident in their car) during his training. Fearing what he did at Gentaro's young age, he pretended to despise Gentaro's ideals of friendship to cover his shame and despair.

- Ryusei, he's strange. But I like his Bruce Lee-attitude.

- This show needs more zodiarts to complete the no. 88 list plus maybe add the former constellations... if Fourze would want another movie.

- Miu, JK & Shun become zodiarts in the beginning during Chamaeleon's, Monoceros' & Hound's appearances. Miu as Cassiopeia, JK as Fox & Shun as Cepheus.

- Sonoda should stay as a rogue.

 

[Ziginz Zegell]

I wish the riders from Kabuto-Wizard can go back to monster of the week like it did with Kuuga-Hibiki. Plus more episodes and not stop at 48.

No. Just...no...fewer monster of the week actually. More monsters that mean something. More Phoenix's, more Bishops, and for the love of God more Sonozaki families!

Fourze:

- Gentaro may be okay due to his gangster look. I wish he had some weaknesses to show like how Shotaro, Haruto & Eiji feel.

- Sonoda should stay as a rogue.

I can actually agree with these two. Sonada could have been more, and I would have prefered more trouble from the horoscopes and fewer weekly Zodiarts. I loved the Zodiarts, but there were a few that could have been skipped for more Horoscope air time.

Gentaro was as awsome as he was because the producers wanted to give the Japanese kids a solid hero they could cheer for. Don't get me wrong, they could cheer for allt he tohers, but after the Earth Quake and Tsunami a simpler hero like Gen was probably really good for them. He did have one weakness though in that if his bonds were broken or he had a hard time helping his friends he got down in the dumps. Just look at what he went through during the Magnet States premiere arc. It wasn't much, but it was there.

Might try to do something to link Dairanger and Gekiranger. Might be fun.