Most people tend to avoid using subtitles if they're trying to make a quality video. You did a pretty good job of avoiding them in your video. I feel that they make video seem tacky and take away from the main visuals(the video itself). I also noticed a few awkward cuts, but aside from that, the video was pretty good.
When I first started making them I would use subs a lot and looking back at them, they looked kind of cheap. Usually when I work on a video now, I'll try to find a raw source, all of my public videos, aside from one random Kabuto video where I was testing out some effects, are sub free. Raws are a great source for action based music video, but they can also give a lot of great stuff to work with for a slow, drama based music video.