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How would you rewrite it?
1. Characters:
- Haruto/Wizard: I like him, but there's no need to put a lot of story origin on him like that soccer thing. Its like Haruto is the mix of Vash the Stampede, Dante & Captain Marvelous. Though I would like for him to become the Dragon Phantom near the end of the show.
- Nitoh/Beast: Do something about him!
- Mayu, Yuzuru & Yamamoto. They should be their own mages with their own jewels. Take Mayu, she can be Witch like Bayonetta. Yuzuru... Alchemist and Yamamoto... Necro (necromancer).
2. Story:
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3. Arsenal:
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4. What should be added?
- A mage/rider should appear serving Section Zero named Kazumi Hoji who becomes Druid.
- Kirin/Qilin. Another Phantom general in service to Wiseman. His gate was once a famous magician/illusionist after the great Houdini. His fame came crashing down and his beloved killed in an accident (or murder) and he fell into despair. With Kirin born and in service to Wiseman, he bides his time to betray him when he learns of his plans to revive Koyomi and takes advantage of it when the sabbath fails. And he'll use the Philosopher's stone to not only create an army of Phantoms and mages, but also revive his beloved from death.
That's all I got for now.
1. Characters:
- Haruto/Wizard: I like him, but there's no need to put a lot of story origin on him like that soccer thing. Its like Haruto is the mix of Vash the Stampede, Dante & Captain Marvelous. Though I would like for him to become the Dragon Phantom near the end of the show.
- Nitoh/Beast: Do something about him!
- Mayu, Yuzuru & Yamamoto. They should be their own mages with their own jewels. Take Mayu, she can be Witch like Bayonetta. Yuzuru... Alchemist and Yamamoto... Necro (necromancer).
2. Story:
......
3. Arsenal:
......
4. What should be added?
- A mage/rider should appear serving Section Zero named Kazumi Hoji who becomes Druid.
- Kirin/Qilin. Another Phantom general in service to Wiseman. His gate was once a famous magician/illusionist after the great Houdini. His fame came crashing down and his beloved killed in an accident (or murder) and he fell into despair. With Kirin born and in service to Wiseman, he bides his time to betray him when he learns of his plans to revive Koyomi and takes advantage of it when the sabbath fails. And he'll use the Philosopher's stone to not only create an army of Phantoms and mages, but also revive his beloved from death.
That's all I got for now.