Hmmm, did we watch the same video...? :eyebrow: Thought it was pretty hella cheesy. A few things...
-Gun choreography was lacking. Most of it was just walk walk walk, shoot shoot shoot, except for the overstylized parts. I'm really tired of seeing people do these way-too-over-the-top "John Woo style" things where anytime you're laying down or sliding on something firing two guns at once it's considered cool. Too unimaginative. And like the parts where the dudes were hopping back and forth between the cubicals was just stupid. Maybe it's just that I've seen so many of these independent action shorts that everything is just glaringly obvious to me.
-2:47, guy wastes a ton of ammo for no reason...?
-Filmmakers, STOP USING MATRIX MUSIC. It wasn't even good when The Matrix used it, rehashing is more of a death wish for your film than having Zee Lo star in it.
-They shouldn't have used Rose-Colored-Sunglasses-Thug twice, that made it feel totally unprofessional.
-"Big twist"? I dunno about big, but it sure was random. So [HIDE]his dad[/HIDE] is the evil leader of the swivelly-chair people and his base of operations is an abandoned Comcast building? It might've been a twist if there had been some character development, or even any characters, but it felt tacked on and sort of pointless. I do like how they got their Bible verse message across in this context though.
It had some serious potential but it just fell back on all these terrible cliches (the suits, the sunglasses, the Matrix music, the overdramatic yet mysteriously storyless execution, the corny shootouts... all these things should be banned, permanently) and thus wound up being completely unremarkable.