Shining Moon - Movie

Shining Moon the Movie
(if I get good feedback on the movie i'll start the series)

Lunar - Shazu Kitama
Solar - Sam Shu Ki
Cloud - Hikaru Nataka
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1 year after the guards got their power and met with cloud's angel. Hikaru became Cloud. Lunar and Solar have been popular untill now...

SHINING MOON ~ NIHON GUARDS - FULL LENGTH MOVIE!

Camara shows Shazu's apartment building. Then her door. Then the bathroom. Shazu was taking a show you could see a little with the blur shower door. Her hand reached out and she put the towel around her. She stepped out and walked to the bedroom. Then she got dressed. She had a mini jean skirt with a leather jacket. She walked out side to see that the streets were empty.
"Nani?" she said in a puzzled tone. "where is everyone? I live in Harajuku and not 1 person is out here" she turned around to be face to face with a monster. She quickly jumped back. She span around and did a jump kick. Meanwhile the monster was trying to grab her leg. She kicked him in the head making blood come out of his mouth. After roundhousing him a few times she noticed it was Hikaru in a costume. Shazu bent down toward Hikaru putting her hand on his head, and saying that he shouldn't be scaring ladys in empty towns. "So where is everyone?" asked Shazu. Hikaru was making faces at her.
"You mean you didn't know that today was the first day of the new 'Super Sentai V.s. Japanese Heros' movie?" said Hikaru.
[MORE SOON]

just a paragraph and it moves so fast.

Great concept
in fact whats the description of your characters
I'll try my best to make them. I did all of these
http://www.cyborgpower1.wz.cz/your_soubory/flashman.htm

I am also a fic writer and heres a tip
take your time with your story. Slow it down a little and add a little more detail.
explain things
and maybe do it more as a story instead of like a movie script with the whole camera shows... thing

Hope it hepls a little. Can't wait to see how everything pans out. I'll be looking forward to it.

Heiwa said:

just a paragraph and it moves so fast.

Great concept
in fact whats the description of your characters
I'll try my best to make them. I did all of these
http://www.cyborgpower1.wz.cz/your_soubory/flashman.htm

I am also a fic writer and heres a tip
take your time with your story. Slow it down a little and add a little more detail.
explain things
and maybe do it more as a story instead of like a movie script with the whole camera shows... thing

Hope it hepls a little. Can't wait to see how everything pans out. I'll be looking forward to it.

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Pretty good art work and thanks for the advice! Yeah I have a problem of being too fast.