Very nice. Not bad at all! Your writing is quite mature; I really enjoyed your descriptions, imaginative, yet chosen so that the portrayal is quite realistic. Without adding extraneous and overt details, you've managed to give your characters both personality and aura.
Thank you for another look into the world we love.
As for suggestions/critique - if you'd really like to hear them, PM me - I fear it might spoil others (don't worry, they're all constructive). Thanks for an enjoyable read! :thumbs: